| Author | Message | ||
| Laurie Byro
Advanced Member Username: lauriette Post Number: 1550 Registered: 11-2003 |
Making Love in Another Language Are we hushed into silence at the dizzying couplets we make with our softest love lips? When we talk deep into the night using thighs, arms, buttocks, drawing long languid syllables down our backs, here and here and there— wet melodies while we speak meaning and thought borrowed from your Neruda, and my Whitman. Through spinning patterns, I take you like a vowel into my mouth, parse you into words that are scribbled just outside the lines. Toes, dance, twilight, mouth, bead, shell—Darling, this is your first language lesson. | ||
| native dancer
Advanced Member Username: nativedancer Post Number: 367 Registered: 12-2004 |
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| Anastacia Donovan
Valued Member Username: sulis Post Number: 278 Registered: 03-2002 |
Mmmmmmmmmm all I can say! Well maybe great poem could be added. Ana | ||
| Dale McLain
Advanced Member Username: sparklingseas Post Number: 1882 Registered: 11-2004 |
Laurie~ I think I need a cigarette... that vowel thing... mmmmmm.... Amazing, as usual. take care~dale | ||
| ~M~
Board Administrator Username: mjm Post Number: 6690 Registered: 11-1998 |
Very clever, dear Laurie, with the word "couplets" in the second line. I don't suppose you could write this one in anything but couplets. *smile* | ||
| Gary Blankenship
Senior Member Username: garyb Post Number: 6840 Registered: 07-2001 |
Laurie, sexy, hot, sensual here though couplets we make with our softest love lips? love lips seems over the top no love modifier? Smiles. Gary A River Transformed The Dawg House December Fireweed | ||
| Laurie Byro
Advanced Member Username: lauriette Post Number: 1555 Registered: 11-2003 |
thanks all appreciate it laurie | ||
| jennifer vanburen
Member Username: annaswirls Post Number: 89 Registered: 10-2005 |
"I take you like a vowel into my mouth" great line! www.mannequinenvy.com | ||
| Laurie Byro
Advanced Member Username: lauriette Post Number: 1558 Registered: 11-2003 |
thqaks jennifer It was pointed out to me that you are in N-gasse ezine who just accepted this one. I had barely looked at the mag, so forgive me. thanks for reading me and I shall look more carefully peace laurie | ||
| LJ Cohen
Moderator Username: ljc Post Number: 4048 Registered: 07-2002 |
Very sensual, Laurie. Phew--it is me or is it hot in here?  ljc Once in a Blue Muse Blog | ||
| Laurie Byro
Advanced Member Username: lauriette Post Number: 1563 Registered: 11-2003 |
thanks lisa this is do to be ezine'd soon peace laurie |
